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Certainly enough to impress, based on the reaction in your 'high places' post by Elysian Symmetry 01/09/2003, 7:24pm PST
The Bath

There were clouds of steam
To confuse your whiteness
To hide behind
When they touched you -
Would the smell of you linger
Would it moisten my mouth

You condensed on angry frost wings
You weighed nothing.

That moment I moved through you
A child's winter breath
Catching snowflakes on his tongue



I liked the beginning word/consonant repetition, so I threw the extra line in. Also, capitalizing on the prey aspect.

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Also by way of exercising my royal perogative by Zseni 01/09/2003, 3:22pm PST NEW
    Certainly enough to impress, based on the reaction in your 'high places' post by Elysian Symmetry 01/09/2003, 7:24pm PST NEW
        Re: Certainly enough to impress, based on the reaction in your 'high places' post by Zseni 01/10/2003, 2:16am PST NEW
    Also: prerogative by Ray, of Light 01/09/2003, 7:45pm PST NEW
        +5 Best Post EVAR by Senor Barborito 01/09/2003, 7:50pm PST NEW
 
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