Caltrops - Peter Molyneux's The Movies





	[quote name="Workshop notes"]You need to tighten your dialogue until it resembles something close to the way actual humans speak, without the tedious repetition and explaining of stuff the characters should already know just to cram in backstory for the audience. Then, you'll have a piece whose only weakness is that the characters are repulsive, dull, and don't understand how humor works. So, in your world, author self-inserts. [/quote]